We thank you for taking the time to apply to Last Voyages. Overall, the moderators like and approve of your application; however, we do have some things we need clarification on before we can provide you with a final approval. Please post your revisions within 72 hours, or we will reject your application.
We'd like to hear a little more about Jiang Cheng's worse qualities. Your app describes a character who has anger issues, but has also developed a degree of control; has self-esteem issues, but is also capable of love and loyalty; who has a violent past, but is also coming in from a canonpoint where he regrets his actions, even if it does currently manifest as self-loathing.
Could you tell us a bit more about his current relationship with his darker traits, and how they qualify him for inmatehood? We'd also like to see more about them in his Path to Redemption; his current PTR focuses purely on his emotional stuntedness, insecurity, and guilt, none of which would qualify someone for inmate status on their own and all of which would be perfectly acceptable in a warden.
Additionally, this isn't something that needs to be part of your revision changes, but we did want to let you know that though those nerfs look good as a preliminary step between being totally depowered and being fully powered, the energy whip function is enough of a weapon that he wouldn't be able to have it right off the bat. That said, it likely wouldn't be too difficult to find a warden onboard who'd be willing to request that it be returned to him if you'd like him to have use if it in-game!
REVISIONS
We thank you for taking the time to apply to Last Voyages. Overall, the moderators like and approve of your application; however, we do have some things we need clarification on before we can provide you with a final approval. Please post your revisions within 72 hours, or we will reject your application.
We'd like to hear a little more about Jiang Cheng's worse qualities. Your app describes a character who has anger issues, but has also developed a degree of control; has self-esteem issues, but is also capable of love and loyalty; who has a violent past, but is also coming in from a canonpoint where he regrets his actions, even if it does currently manifest as self-loathing.
Could you tell us a bit more about his current relationship with his darker traits, and how they qualify him for inmatehood? We'd also like to see more about them in his Path to Redemption; his current PTR focuses purely on his emotional stuntedness, insecurity, and guilt, none of which would qualify someone for inmate status on their own and all of which would be perfectly acceptable in a warden.
Additionally, this isn't something that needs to be part of your revision changes, but we did want to let you know that though those nerfs look good as a preliminary step between being totally depowered and being fully powered, the energy whip function is enough of a weapon that he wouldn't be able to have it right off the bat. That said, it likely wouldn't be too difficult to find a warden onboard who'd be willing to request that it be returned to him if you'd like him to have use if it in-game!